This conversation between Lois and Toby discussing whether Mark is a virgin or not is out there somewhere. I will find it in my notes, I promise. In the meantime, just believe that I've written a conversation where Lois and Toby discuss this and the upshot is that Lois persuades Toby he should talk to Mark about sex.
Toby is not up for this conversation and finds himself dealing with a Mark who is not showing any of the vulnerability or concern Lois insists he must be feeling. He's feeling very good about himself and life in general and is up for the next thing.
In fact, he brings the next thing to them. Toby and Lois are both meant to be out but Toby's thing gets cancelled so he's home. And there he discovers Mark guiltily being caught being naughty while the parent are away. He's smoking dope with Seb. Toby is mortified that Mark is doing this kind of thing behind their back. He sees they're already seen as a bit of a hindrance.
They get stoned and Toby has two things he needs to say
1) he recognises that Mark is a bloke and blokes don't always feel comfortable talking about sex. So he's not going to force any awkward conversations. If you want to talk about it, that's cool. But not going to push it. However if Lois asked they talked about it and he's been really helpful.
2) please indulge Lois. She's well into this for some reason and it would kill her if she discovered that we were doing things without her.
Mark notes that Toby is doing a slightly poor impression of a father trying to be cool but insists he's very grateful and up for what they've got planned. Just he'll do his own stuff as well.
This idea of being a bit like cool parents is one I'd like to develop.
Wednesday, 21 April 2010
Morning after
t's the Sunday morning after. Lois wakes up to hear the smell of bacon frying. She comes down to see Toby putting the final touches to a fry up. She comes down and gives him a big snog. He backs off a bit and she's shocked until she sees Mark also in the
Kitchen resolutely looking out the window. He's surprisingly clear headed but feeling in need of some sugar.
At breakfast he dissects the night before: what it's like to be drunk. The weird dynamic of clubs where so many people don't dance. The fact you spend so much money and don't care. He gets why people seem to cop off with randomers. Awkward silence after that one. Interested how when you're really drunk you just want to drink more even though you clearly don't need it. Why people queue to get into placed where you can't hear each other think even when it's not a place where people do anything but drink.
End on the cop off bit- leads to conversation between Lois and Toby that night.
Note, this should be a really lively conversation, despite the delicacy of Lois. I want there to be a really strong contrast between the noise, the colour, the life of this morning after and what happens later.
Kitchen resolutely looking out the window. He's surprisingly clear headed but feeling in need of some sugar.
At breakfast he dissects the night before: what it's like to be drunk. The weird dynamic of clubs where so many people don't dance. The fact you spend so much money and don't care. He gets why people seem to cop off with randomers. Awkward silence after that one. Interested how when you're really drunk you just want to drink more even though you clearly don't need it. Why people queue to get into placed where you can't hear each other think even when it's not a place where people do anything but drink.
End on the cop off bit- leads to conversation between Lois and Toby that night.
Note, this should be a really lively conversation, despite the delicacy of Lois. I want there to be a really strong contrast between the noise, the colour, the life of this morning after and what happens later.
The Piss Up
This stems from the lessons learnt session they have afterwards (I think Lois should actually call it that, but toby insists on calling it going down the pub for a chat.)
Mark explains he's happy with how it went but under pressure admits he didn't actually have fun. He was concentrating too hard. Toby puts it down to the fact he didn't drink that much. Mark explains he didn't want to get too drunk because he was determined not to embarass them. Once Toby learns that he's touched but convinced he's foun the problem. Further prompting shows that Mark'a never got really pissed and so Toby is determined to make sure that this is sorted out.
Now I can get in my mind why Toby would not want Lois to be there but I can't figure out how lois would not want to be there and there's no way he'd not tell her. She's got to be going somewhere- To see a kid. A godchild.
So why don't they wait until she's free. Because it has to be done asap. It's a hump that needs to be crossed. They expect it to end in tears with him parlaytic and in bed by 4pm. It's not meant to be fun. It's a step to being fun.
But that's not what happens. It's a beautiful sunny day, first of spring and they have champagne in the garden. A bottle with some crunchy nut cornflakes. At this point Mark seems to get merry very quickly and Seb and toby look at each other concerned that this could be over before he begins.
Mark, unaware of these concerns merrily grabs a banana before leadin them to the pub. There they drink an play table football. Then they order some lunch (mark notices one of the things about being wasted is you don't really give a fuck about how much you're spending.) he bets Toby that he will last longer than he will.
Next thing we see it's five o'clock and they're carrying Toby home. 'Problem with Toby, no sense of pacing'. Mark considers taking the tenner off him now but figures he'll only spend it if he takes it. He leaves his card at home and takes £60 with him reasoning that will stop him spending more.
Seb persuades him to come away from suburbia. He's never been to the east end and gets shown round Brick Lane. Then they're having a quick dirty burger to keep them going when they get a call from Lois. She's worried that Mark's in a gutter. She comes after them because she doesn't trust Seb (he has form for slinking off with someone).
When she joins them they go into a club and Mark admits he's never danced in public. But he has spent hours in front of MTV impersonating people. Then Billie Jean comes on (alternatively I would love it to be these guys: he's got the moves. He's all go. Dances with Lois. Tries to dance with Seb but he's not having it. Finds himself dancing with a girl and then Lois starts to panic.
She takes Seb into a corner and discusses what they're going to do. She's worried he's a virgin and he's going to spoil it on a drunken binge with a floozy. Seb points out that there's nothing to spoil. She says she thinks it's nice he's waited. Seb points out he hasn't waited. He's been kidnapped.
However their concerns amount to little because a phone goes off in Mark's pocket and he has to go outside to answer it. He's taken Toby's phone with him by accident and Toby was panicking. But Mark wasn't going anywhere with that girl and thinks nothing of it. In fact what he's thinking right now is he feels a bit funny.
Mark stays outside and has a sit down. And a chunder. And a little bit of a cry. But one about how he's never been able to do this before. It's borderline tears of joy. Certainly that's how Seb spins it. They get a cab home.
Mark explains he's happy with how it went but under pressure admits he didn't actually have fun. He was concentrating too hard. Toby puts it down to the fact he didn't drink that much. Mark explains he didn't want to get too drunk because he was determined not to embarass them. Once Toby learns that he's touched but convinced he's foun the problem. Further prompting shows that Mark'a never got really pissed and so Toby is determined to make sure that this is sorted out.
Now I can get in my mind why Toby would not want Lois to be there but I can't figure out how lois would not want to be there and there's no way he'd not tell her. She's got to be going somewhere- To see a kid. A godchild.
So why don't they wait until she's free. Because it has to be done asap. It's a hump that needs to be crossed. They expect it to end in tears with him parlaytic and in bed by 4pm. It's not meant to be fun. It's a step to being fun.
But that's not what happens. It's a beautiful sunny day, first of spring and they have champagne in the garden. A bottle with some crunchy nut cornflakes. At this point Mark seems to get merry very quickly and Seb and toby look at each other concerned that this could be over before he begins.
Mark, unaware of these concerns merrily grabs a banana before leadin them to the pub. There they drink an play table football. Then they order some lunch (mark notices one of the things about being wasted is you don't really give a fuck about how much you're spending.) he bets Toby that he will last longer than he will.
Next thing we see it's five o'clock and they're carrying Toby home. 'Problem with Toby, no sense of pacing'. Mark considers taking the tenner off him now but figures he'll only spend it if he takes it. He leaves his card at home and takes £60 with him reasoning that will stop him spending more.
Seb persuades him to come away from suburbia. He's never been to the east end and gets shown round Brick Lane. Then they're having a quick dirty burger to keep them going when they get a call from Lois. She's worried that Mark's in a gutter. She comes after them because she doesn't trust Seb (he has form for slinking off with someone).
When she joins them they go into a club and Mark admits he's never danced in public. But he has spent hours in front of MTV impersonating people. Then Billie Jean comes on (alternatively I would love it to be these guys: he's got the moves. He's all go. Dances with Lois. Tries to dance with Seb but he's not having it. Finds himself dancing with a girl and then Lois starts to panic.
She takes Seb into a corner and discusses what they're going to do. She's worried he's a virgin and he's going to spoil it on a drunken binge with a floozy. Seb points out that there's nothing to spoil. She says she thinks it's nice he's waited. Seb points out he hasn't waited. He's been kidnapped.
However their concerns amount to little because a phone goes off in Mark's pocket and he has to go outside to answer it. He's taken Toby's phone with him by accident and Toby was panicking. But Mark wasn't going anywhere with that girl and thinks nothing of it. In fact what he's thinking right now is he feels a bit funny.
Mark stays outside and has a sit down. And a chunder. And a little bit of a cry. But one about how he's never been able to do this before. It's borderline tears of joy. Certainly that's how Seb spins it. They get a cab home.
Occupations
I think before I get any further I do need to establish what kind of jobs they have.
Lois is obviously a consultant. I feel it should be rebranding. Her great achievements involve us no longer thinking of sweets by their old names. Makes her very unpopular with people who loved Opal Fruits as she thinks of that as the pinnacle of what they do.
Toby is less successful. This is not a big deal. If anything the gap between their careers has diminished as he's doing better. At what? He's not a salesman. Although I quite like the idea that he does something which sounds really flash and glamorous but is revered in his office for just being solid and unflaky. Advertising. Yeah, I think that could work. (that way when they're trying to score drugs people can say he should be able to get hold of it. I like the idea that near the end he finds some and decides whether to take it. I think he should be a creative but for crap things like insurance.
And then Mark what should he study? It needs to be a book subject so he's got plenty of time. Languages? No, because he would have had to go abroad. I kind of want him to be studying Goffman and Garfinkel but I wonder if it would put grit in the comedic wheels. Alternatively he could be an historian of a time which seems wonderfully irrelevant. I'd like the idea of him studying the first 500 years of London. Maybe not even the first 500 years. Up to Hogarth.
I like that so half the streets in London he knows by reputation because he can tell you what Samuel Pepys did there or even earlier. So yes, he's studying the rise of London (between 1530 and 1605 the population went from 50,000 to 225,000). That's as part of the History MA at UCL looking at the Public Sphere in British History (1476-1800). Lots of coffee houses and back of a pub publications.
Lois is obviously a consultant. I feel it should be rebranding. Her great achievements involve us no longer thinking of sweets by their old names. Makes her very unpopular with people who loved Opal Fruits as she thinks of that as the pinnacle of what they do.
Toby is less successful. This is not a big deal. If anything the gap between their careers has diminished as he's doing better. At what? He's not a salesman. Although I quite like the idea that he does something which sounds really flash and glamorous but is revered in his office for just being solid and unflaky. Advertising. Yeah, I think that could work. (that way when they're trying to score drugs people can say he should be able to get hold of it. I like the idea that near the end he finds some and decides whether to take it. I think he should be a creative but for crap things like insurance.
And then Mark what should he study? It needs to be a book subject so he's got plenty of time. Languages? No, because he would have had to go abroad. I kind of want him to be studying Goffman and Garfinkel but I wonder if it would put grit in the comedic wheels. Alternatively he could be an historian of a time which seems wonderfully irrelevant. I'd like the idea of him studying the first 500 years of London. Maybe not even the first 500 years. Up to Hogarth.
I like that so half the streets in London he knows by reputation because he can tell you what Samuel Pepys did there or even earlier. So yes, he's studying the rise of London (between 1530 and 1605 the population went from 50,000 to 225,000). That's as part of the History MA at UCL looking at the Public Sphere in British History (1476-1800). Lots of coffee houses and back of a pub publications.
The first party
Rather than going all tactical And asking myself what I want fr this scene (which was my first instinct) I'm just going to add elements and see if they add anything.
So Mark is:
Keen to converse (has some pre-prepared conversations, many of which are a little heavy for strangers. He feels like he's been shown how to do it when Seb shows up and produces a Jack story)
He's very deliberately not getting too drunk- three drinks all night and he insulated himself well before he came out.
He's spent a lot of time worrying about how he looks and so is constantly checking even though with Lois's steer he's wearing the most simple styles.
He's determined to strike out on his own, in a way few people are when they go to a party they don't know anyone at.
And how about Toby? He's aware of his responsibilities to take care of Mark and will naturally do it in his low key way. He's told Seb to come along as he knows he will make it more fun. He's confused and a little offended when Mark doesn't seem to want to hang with him. He gets quite drunk. And when he's drunk he gets quite merry and quite loving but a little boring.
Lois: the key thing about Lois is that she can switch it on. She goes to a party and she's all high fives and flirting. It's nit false. As mentioned previously she is a genuinely warm person. But it is a little bit of an effort, a projection. It is in some ways not that 'fun'. It's her friend's party but she doesn't know that many people there. And quite a lot in a 'oh yeah we met at the last one type way'. So she works it and wants to take Mark with her but he wants to do his own thing. And because she is always watching out for him she's slightly put off her stride.
Seb is brought in because the party might be boring. He's already drunk and he's brought plenty of booze. He tells a story about his mate Jack which Mark is in awe of. It highlights the fact that Mark has no anecdotes. He asks if it would be weird if he started telling it. You wouldn't be the first.
And the others: i think it should definitely be a girls party- lots of crudités, candles everywhere, petals in the bath. And there should be a lot of girls there. So that they are quite pleased to have Mark come up to
Them. They find him a little boring but quite sweet.
He takes that. "My chief aim was for them not to think of me as weird. I succeeded, baby steps."
So Mark is:
Keen to converse (has some pre-prepared conversations, many of which are a little heavy for strangers. He feels like he's been shown how to do it when Seb shows up and produces a Jack story)
He's very deliberately not getting too drunk- three drinks all night and he insulated himself well before he came out.
He's spent a lot of time worrying about how he looks and so is constantly checking even though with Lois's steer he's wearing the most simple styles.
He's determined to strike out on his own, in a way few people are when they go to a party they don't know anyone at.
And how about Toby? He's aware of his responsibilities to take care of Mark and will naturally do it in his low key way. He's told Seb to come along as he knows he will make it more fun. He's confused and a little offended when Mark doesn't seem to want to hang with him. He gets quite drunk. And when he's drunk he gets quite merry and quite loving but a little boring.
Lois: the key thing about Lois is that she can switch it on. She goes to a party and she's all high fives and flirting. It's nit false. As mentioned previously she is a genuinely warm person. But it is a little bit of an effort, a projection. It is in some ways not that 'fun'. It's her friend's party but she doesn't know that many people there. And quite a lot in a 'oh yeah we met at the last one type way'. So she works it and wants to take Mark with her but he wants to do his own thing. And because she is always watching out for him she's slightly put off her stride.
Seb is brought in because the party might be boring. He's already drunk and he's brought plenty of booze. He tells a story about his mate Jack which Mark is in awe of. It highlights the fact that Mark has no anecdotes. He asks if it would be weird if he started telling it. You wouldn't be the first.
And the others: i think it should definitely be a girls party- lots of crudités, candles everywhere, petals in the bath. And there should be a lot of girls there. So that they are quite pleased to have Mark come up to
Them. They find him a little boring but quite sweet.
He takes that. "My chief aim was for them not to think of me as weird. I succeeded, baby steps."
Wednesday, 14 April 2010
Qualities I admire
Something I'm very aware of right now is that much of the emotional core of the movie centres around Toby and Lois and I'm not sure I'm really sure if I like them so I'm going to try something a little random and see if it works.
It's a list of characteristics I am attracted to. I'm hoping I'll be able to then see which of these Toby and Lois have and build around them so that's it's firmed up that they're people you like. This is going to come across as staggeringly narcissistic as a lot of them are ones I think of myself as having but there you go. If everytime you looked in a mirror you saw me, you'd understand.
Warmth
Self mocking
Good listener
Curious
Witty
Fond of making a fool out of oneself
Articulate
Romantic
Cynical
Wry
Flirtatious
Crude
Considerate
Loyal
Spontaneous
Pro-active
Politically engaged
Open to new people
Comfortable in their own skin
Unafraid of big thoughts
Good at the art of conversation and hosting
Interested in the world
Tolerant
Non-judgemental
Not too tidy
Relaxed
Creative
Eco-conscious
Hygienic
Hard working
Driven
Inappropriate sometimes
Backs themseleves (and certainly doesn't do themselves down publically)
Generous
Astute
Passionate
Will doubtless add to this but do feel free to add more to the bottom.
It's a list of characteristics I am attracted to. I'm hoping I'll be able to then see which of these Toby and Lois have and build around them so that's it's firmed up that they're people you like. This is going to come across as staggeringly narcissistic as a lot of them are ones I think of myself as having but there you go. If everytime you looked in a mirror you saw me, you'd understand.
Warmth
Self mocking
Good listener
Curious
Witty
Fond of making a fool out of oneself
Articulate
Romantic
Cynical
Wry
Flirtatious
Crude
Considerate
Loyal
Spontaneous
Pro-active
Politically engaged
Open to new people
Comfortable in their own skin
Unafraid of big thoughts
Good at the art of conversation and hosting
Interested in the world
Tolerant
Non-judgemental
Not too tidy
Relaxed
Creative
Eco-conscious
Hygienic
Hard working
Driven
Inappropriate sometimes
Backs themseleves (and certainly doesn't do themselves down publically)
Generous
Astute
Passionate
Will doubtless add to this but do feel free to add more to the bottom.
Friends of Lois
The thing about Lois is that all her most impotant friends are a step ahead. And while she can't imagine doing the next step with anyone but Toby she's not totally sure she want to take it just yet. But Toby does and she'd rather go at a quicker pace then not stay in time with him.
Her friends suggest it's weird that he's leading it. Feel like their fellas needed to get something out of their system before they agreed to settle.
One of the things about Lois is she's a great friend. Listens, picks people up when they're down. Is truly warm. And one of the people she's devoting time to taking care of is someone whose husband has been banging someone. And she feels like she rushed him into settling. He'd been a late bloomer and then she'd come along and he hadn't got it out of his system.
That sparks something for Lois but the problem is she's generally a listener not a listened. Toby's the person who listens to her. And she can't talk to Toby about it so she doesn't run it past anyone just let's it make her go a bit demented.
So the people she parties with are not quite her best friends. They're work people. Younger than she is. Funner than her other friends. And she doesn't feel they see her as a particularly older (she's right although there is a little bit of admiration for how sorted her life seems to be, she's got the whole package but is still able to have fun). But every now and then she feels the gap.
So they should be people she feels she can tag along with on a night out and crucially people she would like to set Mark up with, but they're not bosom buddies. So they may sort of see what's going on but are not in a position to tell her.
Her friends suggest it's weird that he's leading it. Feel like their fellas needed to get something out of their system before they agreed to settle.
One of the things about Lois is she's a great friend. Listens, picks people up when they're down. Is truly warm. And one of the people she's devoting time to taking care of is someone whose husband has been banging someone. And she feels like she rushed him into settling. He'd been a late bloomer and then she'd come along and he hadn't got it out of his system.
That sparks something for Lois but the problem is she's generally a listener not a listened. Toby's the person who listens to her. And she can't talk to Toby about it so she doesn't run it past anyone just let's it make her go a bit demented.
So the people she parties with are not quite her best friends. They're work people. Younger than she is. Funner than her other friends. And she doesn't feel they see her as a particularly older (she's right although there is a little bit of admiration for how sorted her life seems to be, she's got the whole package but is still able to have fun). But every now and then she feels the gap.
So they should be people she feels she can tag along with on a night out and crucially people she would like to set Mark up with, but they're not bosom buddies. So they may sort of see what's going on but are not in a position to tell her.
Seb
He is essentially the same character from Thing about Jack (but Toby is not Toby (later Adam) from Jack. I just have a strangely limited number of names for my character)
The reason why I want him in this story is essentially two fold:
Firstly he is a party animal. He is the one who will get them into places where they wouldn't otherwise go. He can score them weed. And he genuinely seems to enjoy his hedonistic lifestyle.
Second he's a genuine confidant. Lois is just wrong. Too intense. Too interfering. And Toby is the opposite, he just seems so uninterested in so much of it Mark doesn't want to go there.
But perhaps Seb is important because he highlights what's good about Toby and Lois as individuals and as a couple. The point about Seb is he is fiercely loyal to both of them. Toby is a friend from school and he knows what a difference Lois has made to his life. And he sees why Toby is so good for Lois.
So if they do split up, Seb is going to be very determined to get them back together and will tell Mark that he was the reason they split and he's going to have to be part of the solution that puts them back together.
The reason why I want him in this story is essentially two fold:
Firstly he is a party animal. He is the one who will get them into places where they wouldn't otherwise go. He can score them weed. And he genuinely seems to enjoy his hedonistic lifestyle.
Second he's a genuine confidant. Lois is just wrong. Too intense. Too interfering. And Toby is the opposite, he just seems so uninterested in so much of it Mark doesn't want to go there.
But perhaps Seb is important because he highlights what's good about Toby and Lois as individuals and as a couple. The point about Seb is he is fiercely loyal to both of them. Toby is a friend from school and he knows what a difference Lois has made to his life. And he sees why Toby is so good for Lois.
So if they do split up, Seb is going to be very determined to get them back together and will tell Mark that he was the reason they split and he's going to have to be part of the solution that puts them back together.
Mark and Sex
One of the most important things about Mark's character is that he is not embarassed about his situation. He knows it's not his fault so he refuses to apologise for it. And that goes for never being in a relationship.
But a lack of fundamental shame in himself doesn't mean that he's not embarassed in the moment. He doesn't know what to do when confronted with overt come ons. Which his dancing does bring.
I think the key is to think how Toby and Lois react to this.
Lois has two thoughts: the first is, this guy is a catch I have to prime him to go out with one of my single friends. The second is this is something he needs help with, even if he doesn't show any inclination to do anything about it.
Toby's feeling is that he's doing an awful lot right now. Perhaps he's the first to recognise that a relapse isn't impossible. And he's also a romantic. He reckons the time to deal with this is the time he likes someone and Lois's boot camp won't help and is likely to cause problems.
I sense a 'how to get the girl' powerpoint coming.
But a lack of fundamental shame in himself doesn't mean that he's not embarassed in the moment. He doesn't know what to do when confronted with overt come ons. Which his dancing does bring.
I think the key is to think how Toby and Lois react to this.
Lois has two thoughts: the first is, this guy is a catch I have to prime him to go out with one of my single friends. The second is this is something he needs help with, even if he doesn't show any inclination to do anything about it.
Toby's feeling is that he's doing an awful lot right now. Perhaps he's the first to recognise that a relapse isn't impossible. And he's also a romantic. He reckons the time to deal with this is the time he likes someone and Lois's boot camp won't help and is likely to cause problems.
I sense a 'how to get the girl' powerpoint coming.
Clubbing
I really like the idea that Mark becomes well into his dancing. Now I must justify this so people don't go, that's because he's just another extension of you and you like dancing. Well write what you know and all that.
Fuzzy attempt at rationalisation follows:
It's such a visual way of expressing joy
I like the idea he should be quickly be better at something then Lois and Toby and indeed everyone is.
I think it can work as a tension point between Lois and Toby. Toby doesn't really like dancing and isn't up for clubbing but Lois loves it and uses Mark as a cover to make him go.
Most importantly I think it's a good way of bringing in the issue of sex. He dances with confidence and panache but doesn't know how to convert it. Well no, it's less a question of knowledge although he certainly is clueless. He doesn't want it. He needs the first time to be special. Quite right too.
Fuzzy attempt at rationalisation follows:
It's such a visual way of expressing joy
I like the idea he should be quickly be better at something then Lois and Toby and indeed everyone is.
I think it can work as a tension point between Lois and Toby. Toby doesn't really like dancing and isn't up for clubbing but Lois loves it and uses Mark as a cover to make him go.
Most importantly I think it's a good way of bringing in the issue of sex. He dances with confidence and panache but doesn't know how to convert it. Well no, it's less a question of knowledge although he certainly is clueless. He doesn't want it. He needs the first time to be special. Quite right too.
Lois's project plan for big fun
This really needs to be a powerpoint. I think I may actually make it and have it as an attachment to the script.
So it includes:
Drugs
Clubbing (cheese, drum n bass, indie)
Dressing up parties (can't have another party so pressgang Seb into having a party. Has to have a theme- Mark suggests illnesses)
Karaoke
Daytrip to Brighton (to break it up, also I feel this might be a good place for him to find a bit of romance for the first time)
Also, this can't be on the powerpoint but I think it would be great if Lois spots a weather forecast and organises for them all to go sledging in the snow. Just because it is about the funnest thing in the world. Fact.
So it includes:
Drugs
Clubbing (cheese, drum n bass, indie)
Dressing up parties (can't have another party so pressgang Seb into having a party. Has to have a theme- Mark suggests illnesses)
Karaoke
Daytrip to Brighton (to break it up, also I feel this might be a good place for him to find a bit of romance for the first time)
Also, this can't be on the powerpoint but I think it would be great if Lois spots a weather forecast and organises for them all to go sledging in the snow. Just because it is about the funnest thing in the world. Fact.
Relapse
All I wanted to say is that up until this point I hadn't actually thought of Mark getting a relapse. The point was he was better, end of. But it makes sense as a threat, so it should be there in the background. Something Toby is aware of and Lois thinks is patronising.
I wonder if it could be used as a reason to bring them all back together?
I wonder if it could be used as a reason to bring them all back together?
Some advanced fun notes
Hey,
Bunch of small posts based on scribbles I've been tapping onto my iPhone (yeah, that's right iPhones, blogs, this a totally 21st century writing process).
Basically I've been stuck on Advanced Fun for a while, partly because I think I've simply been convinced I need to come up with a plot when really i should just sit with the characters for a bit and see what happens. So here we go.
I think in order to find out what happens to Mark we need to know more about him. And to do htat I need to write more about him.
So let's look at the situations he's in.
I think at the first party he needs to actually drink too much because he reasons if he loses control over himself he'll just embarass Lois and Toby
Toby is curious by this and with a bit of prodding discovers that Mark has never been properly off his face and so decides to rectify this: the two of them and Seb go on a full on bender. They start with a champagne breakfast then into the pub for first orders and off they go. Toby has to be put to bed at 5pm but Mark and Seb keep going. Eventually Lois comes looking for them, upset with what they've done to Toby but ends up going out with them and lets her hair down in a way we wouldn't have guessed so far. Seb reveals that Lois used to be quite the wild one.
This makes Lois feel more energised about the project but also convinced that this is as much for Toby as it is for Mark.
She berated Toby but not sticking it out and begines her big plan of what they should be doing.
Bunch of small posts based on scribbles I've been tapping onto my iPhone (yeah, that's right iPhones, blogs, this a totally 21st century writing process).
Basically I've been stuck on Advanced Fun for a while, partly because I think I've simply been convinced I need to come up with a plot when really i should just sit with the characters for a bit and see what happens. So here we go.
I think in order to find out what happens to Mark we need to know more about him. And to do htat I need to write more about him.
So let's look at the situations he's in.
I think at the first party he needs to actually drink too much because he reasons if he loses control over himself he'll just embarass Lois and Toby
Toby is curious by this and with a bit of prodding discovers that Mark has never been properly off his face and so decides to rectify this: the two of them and Seb go on a full on bender. They start with a champagne breakfast then into the pub for first orders and off they go. Toby has to be put to bed at 5pm but Mark and Seb keep going. Eventually Lois comes looking for them, upset with what they've done to Toby but ends up going out with them and lets her hair down in a way we wouldn't have guessed so far. Seb reveals that Lois used to be quite the wild one.
This makes Lois feel more energised about the project but also convinced that this is as much for Toby as it is for Mark.
She berated Toby but not sticking it out and begines her big plan of what they should be doing.
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